First Draft Feedback

First Draft Feedback

Overall our draft opening was met with positive feedback specifically towards our use of sound and the fast montage of clips near the end of the piece. The one big critic that was given to us was about the ending. We finished our opening with a long gap that made it feel like the end of a short film rather than an intro leading into the rest of the film. To tackle this and make it seem as though the rest of the story was coming up we completely change the last scene. We added more dialogue and changed the shots. It is no longer a close up zooming out into a long shot but instead consists of a closeup a long shot and then a close up again. All is edited with straight cuts. It also cuts out to black quickly at then end to give the impression that more action is to come directly after the last shot. Other smaller details that were changed included the ordering of the credits and the font that they are in.